ITS A ROMANTIC SONG ABOUT KISSING AND STUFF
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Thankyou Dennis for my first feed back , I will re-do the vocals , you are not the first person to say this , I do find it tempting to play with effects but I have learned now I think its a better idea to leave vocals with a real sound organic and un effected . Your feed back was very helpful Thankyou !
July 04, 2014
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Nathan,
This is nice. You have painted some nice images with your lyric. This is not bad - but you end the chorus on a strange note. I expected you to drop back down to the root note, but you end on something else. It stands out, which is maybe what you intended.
Nice song.
July 30, 2014
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THE STARS STILL SHINE
By Nathan Wall
close your eyes my darling
its gonna be alright
the mockingbird has stopped its calling
and its fast asleep in the trees
come the morning we,ll be wandering
under the first day of the summer skyes
and all your cares and all your troubles
you can leave them all behind
look see the sky and how the stars still shine
is it true you are mine
say you are tonight
see i was born for this one moment to arrive
so close your eyes and let me kiss you
for the first time
I never heard the breezes and how they sweetly sing
there calling out you name babe
as it carries back to me
the trees are whispering
as I breathing you in
but somewhere in the distance
morning is on its way
look see the sky and how the stars still shine
is it true you are mine
say you are tonight
see i was born for this one moment to arrive
so close your eyes and let me kiss you
for the first time
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Nathan,
Thanks for requesting feedback from me. I’m happy to give you my thoughts.
I really like this intro and the classic underlining feel to this song. My only big critique is the effect on the vocals. I think if that was removed the song would take on a more sophisticated feel.
This whole song is very unique. I do like it. The instruments are really nice layered in the background and the guitar just peaks in at the right times.
All in all my biggest critique is the vocal effect. The song also just kind of ended however it fits well with the way the song currently feels. I get the feeling of endlessness with this song. Not a bad thing.
I hope my feedback was helpful.
June 30, 2014
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Thankyou Dennis for my first feed back , I will re-do the vocals , you are not the first person to say this , I do find it tempting to play with effects but I have learned now I think its a better idea to leave vocals with a real sound organic and un effected . Your feed back was very helpful Thankyou !
July 04, 2014
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Nathan,
This is nice. You have painted some nice images with your lyric. This is not bad - but you end the chorus on a strange note. I expected you to drop back down to the root note, but you end on something else. It stands out, which is maybe what you intended.
Nice song.
July 30, 2014
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Dennis Field
Nathan,
Thanks for requesting feedback from me. I’m happy to give you my thoughts.
I really like this intro and the classic underlining feel to this song. My only big critique is the effect on the vocals. I think if that was removed the song would take on a more sophisticated feel.
This whole song is very unique. I do like it. The instruments are really nice layered in the background and the guitar just peaks in at the right times.
All in all my biggest critique is the vocal effect. The song also just kind of ended however it fits well with the way the song currently feels. I get the feeling of endlessness with this song. Not a bad thing.
I hope my feedback was helpful.
June 30, 2014
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