The song is about a man who loves a woman so much but she doesn’t appreciate it their love the same way he does.
I think this is a great song. My producing capabilities are very limited and I understand that. I also know that this song isn’t recorded perfectly or in perfect time but it’s got great bones.
Okay I listened to all three of your songs and I think this one is the best. You’ve got a good tone. My advice would be to rewrite it but make it about something else. Like what if you were the son of a father who worked at a place and you swore you would never do that kind of work but then you end up doing it. It’s kinda like being drawn to someone but feeling she’s not right but you don’t know why. That’s my .02
January 21, 2026
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I am kinda yearning for another verse or bridge of what she deserves because that line is still a mystery. Is it what she thinks she deserves or in reality like karma what she deserves?
January 23, 2026
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Oh! I really like the love’s lost on you/us now line and how it fits.
January 23, 2026
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Will you ever grow up? No
I keep fucking up almost everything..
So you said you’re packing up? Go
I’m so tired of showing up in every way..
And I’d beg you to stay,
Pour out my heart and you’d leave anyway
So for what it’s all worth, I just don’t think that you could ever get what you deserve,
And when you die..
I hope it’s painful
Cuz girl you’re not the angel that they all think you are. And it’s shameful, how you take the truth and take it out so goddamn far.
And I’d beg you to stay,
Poor out my heart and you’d leave anyway,
So for what it’s all worth, I just don’t think that you could ever get what you deserve..
Because our loves lost on you now., etc etc
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Wow! How isn’t there more positive feedback! Somebody call John Mayer and Post Malone.. this guy writes HITS
January 21, 2026
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Okay I listened to all three of your songs and I think this one is the best. You’ve got a good tone. My advice would be to rewrite it but make it about something else. Like what if you were the son of a father who worked at a place and you swore you would never do that kind of work but then you end up doing it. It’s kinda like being drawn to someone but feeling she’s not right but you don’t know why. That’s my .02
January 21, 2026
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I am kinda yearning for another verse or bridge of what she deserves because that line is still a mystery. Is it what she thinks she deserves or in reality like karma what she deserves?
January 23, 2026
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Oh! I really like the love’s lost on you/us now line and how it fits.
January 23, 2026
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Wow! How isn’t there more positive feedback! Somebody call John Mayer and Post Malone.. this guy writes HITS
January 21, 2026
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