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A song about overcoming the shame of SA
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Unfamiliar ravens sing good morning
Pavement growing hot on my bare feet
Wave down the bus, divert concerned eyes
Stumble to an lonely, empty seat
No cover, no rest, no bearings
No memory of night been and through
Torn dress stares from the waste bin
I ask, is there room for two
Chorus:
Words that felt too dark for clean white paper
Stagnant water in my body, years and months
I left my room, a bright eyes wolverine,
Returned a stranger and a fawn
Lock the door, make my body small now
Shower water runs brown down the drain
Scrub my skin raw to scrub away the feeling
But the purple marks on my body remain
Unrequited blame, no face to land on
A formless monster hiding in plain sight
Forced my burning eyes to my reflection
I stared until day turned into night
Chorus:
They took from me possessions of no worth now
My body, it was not theirs to take
The fire that they tried to put out
Burns higher now, reclamation as the stoke
Shame burns at the stake
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Wow. It’s heavy. Such an horrible situation.
Other than being cathartic, this sounds like a very special small venue specific audience song or specific to a scene in tv or movie.
I don’t know anything about folk music besides how it sounds. That said, I think your title is great. I like the chorus about it not being theirs to take and shame burning at the stake. I think that you could tighten up the lyrics a bit. It’s unclear if there’s two of you like you and a sister or if you feel like two different people now. Also, your metaphors are good.
January 27, 2026
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DeeDee Beeler
Wow. It’s heavy. Such an horrible situation.
Other than being cathartic, this sounds like a very special small venue specific audience song or specific to a scene in tv or movie.
I don’t know anything about folk music besides how it sounds. That said, I think your title is great. I like the chorus about it not being theirs to take and shame burning at the stake. I think that you could tighten up the lyrics a bit. It’s unclear if there’s two of you like you and a sister or if you feel like two different people now. Also, your metaphors are good.
January 27, 2026
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