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I wrote this song about a friend of mine being bullied.
I just wouldn't mind hearing criticism to better my craft.
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What a cool voice you have! It’s very original and adds a lot of interest to your lyrics. I really like this song and how it leaves itself open to a variety of interpretation. The only critique I have is from the production standpoint, I would re-record the harmonies on the chorus and get them better aligned with the melody in terms of timing. I would also add another instrument in the chorus to build that more… only because I like it so much. 
April 12, 2014
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Faces stained with smiles
To disarm my guard
I cover my ears
So they don't feed my fears
It's like a long road home
That I don't know
And it's seeing things
From the outside in
I do things do
Which of them can you use
You will make your plans
With or without my hands
It's like a long road home
That I don't know
And it's seeing things
From the outside in
I won't play your game
I will make mistakes
And now on my own
There's one thing that's for sure
It's like a long road home
That I don't know
And it's seeing things
From the outside in
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This is a cool tune. I love the simplicity of the structure and the melody contrasted with the seriousness of the subject matter.
I really have nothing to critique. I think this song works as is. Nice job.
March 29, 2014
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What a cool voice you have! It’s very original and adds a lot of interest to your lyrics. I really like this song and how it leaves itself open to a variety of interpretation. The only critique I have is from the production standpoint, I would re-record the harmonies on the chorus and get them better aligned with the melody in terms of timing. I would also add another instrument in the chorus to build that more… only because I like it so much.
April 12, 2014
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Dick Plunk
This is a cool tune. I love the simplicity of the structure and the melody contrasted with the seriousness of the subject matter.
I really have nothing to critique. I think this song works as is. Nice job.
March 29, 2014