I wrote this as a kind of romantic ode to the iconic western film genre. The story is told by the wife or lover of the sheriff of a western town like you would see in an old John Wayne movie. The sheriff is gunned down and the song is the wife's lament.
I think in the beginning, the guitar drowned the vocals a bit. I think the melody of the song was good and definitely steady. I enjoyed it. The lyrics painted a lot of imagery. You had a refrain for a hook vs a full chorus like many often write. Good job, thanks for sharing.
April 21, 2014
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Every cold shoulder, every cold night
Has found me sore, too tired, to sit upright
uptight
I'll tell you, everything come morning
A gun in holster, black and blue
A vest adorned with gold
For us, we rest
For him, contested grace
took him away from me
In the end, I could have burned
this town to the ground
For us, we rest
For him, contested grace
That's what they call duty
You wanted to take me in
sit me down by a fire
and we'll share our memories
of unwavering faith, his grace
unyielding to the last
demonstration of duty
In the end, I could have burned
this town to the ground
For us, we rest
For him, contested grace
that's what they call duty
No thanks I said
I'm moving on,
though I'd be treasured you say
No more light comes from this
western sun, for me
I'll set out again
Will you kill again?
Every cold shoulder
Every cold night
has found me sore, too tired
to sit upright
uptight
I'll tell you everything come morning.
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Hey Emily,
I like the melody you’ve set up with your voice. The volume of your guitar kind of hinders my ability to hear the lyrics very well, though.
I think you could achieve so much more motion in this song if you play with dynamics a little bit. Play off your lyrics a little bit to see where you can become softer or louder - it would really add some interest to the song.
Thanks for sharing!
March 19, 2014
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I think in the beginning, the guitar drowned the vocals a bit. I think the melody of the song was good and definitely steady. I enjoyed it. The lyrics painted a lot of imagery. You had a refrain for a hook vs a full chorus like many often write. Good job, thanks for sharing.
April 21, 2014
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Hey Emily,
I like the melody you’ve set up with your voice. The volume of your guitar kind of hinders my ability to hear the lyrics very well, though.
I think you could achieve so much more motion in this song if you play with dynamics a little bit. Play off your lyrics a little bit to see where you can become softer or louder - it would really add some interest to the song.
Thanks for sharing!
March 19, 2014
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