Probably not the kind of song anyone is cutting right now; but I got the idea after working late one night and coming home tired. There was a big moon shining down through the locust tree and I thought a beer sounded good, hence a "having a beer with the moon." As I recall, I had supper instead and went back to my music room to write the idea down. The concept of the song was to use an AABA form, to make it conversational, and to use as few words as possible. to get my idea across. That form is seldom used today but has its charm and a ton of old pop songs were written that way. Also, in this song, the moon-tune rhyme was so obvious, I wondered if offsetting it with an inner rhyme of equally cheesy tear-beer would work.
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(Verse)
Empty house, Friday evening
Nowhere I really wanted to be
Got a hundred and sixty-five cable channels
Nothing to watch on TV
(Chorus)
So, I’m out on the porch with a flat-top Martin
Trying to pick out a tune
Fighting a tear
Thinking about her
Having a beer with the moon
(Verse)
Sometimes, I take a drive in the country
Park somewhere and turn off the radio
Alone with my thoughts, it’s the same conversation
Why did she have to go?
(Chorus)
I’m back on the porch with a flat-top Martin
Trying to pick out a tune.
Fighting a tear
Thinking about her
Having a beer with the moon
(Bridge)
In the mornings, the sun still rises
My life passes into sunset
Got my heart broke but I treasure the memories
I don’t think I really want to forget
(Chorus)
So, I’m out on the porch with this old flat-top Martin
Trying to make it make sense with a tune.
Fighting a tear
Thinking about her
Having a beer with the moon
(Tag)
I’m just having a beer with the moon
Out here having a beer with the moon
Copyright, ©, 2023 Kelly Gazzaway
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