Losing someone in your life can be hard to handle.
Whatever you want to say
Hi Will,
Good song!!
I wonder if the arrangement would be cooler if you went to 2nd verse rather than Chorus after the 1st verse?
Thanks, Brent
March 31, 2023
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Vs:
You still have his voicemails
Saved in your phone
You replay them everytime
You feel lost and alone
You have his children, his Chevy
Everything he left behind
But he can’t be there with you
When you lay down at night, so
Ch:
Call me when you’re drinking
Before you’ve had too much
Whiskey don’t drown memories
Or take away his touch
I know you miss him, I can listen
Don’t wait till you break down
Call me when you’re drinking
I’ll always be around
Vs:
You knew this day could happen
But you hid it in your heart
When they notified you
It blew your world apart
I fought beside him in battle
He always mentioned you
I’m not trying to take his place
I just want to help you through
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Hi Will,
Good song!!
I wonder if the arrangement would be cooler if you went to 2nd verse rather than Chorus after the 1st verse?
Thanks, Brent
March 31, 2023
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Ted Mendell
Sounds good.
March 11, 2023
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