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Still in the works, this song means to give a POV to the "other woman" in a relationship. She is not the villain, but rather the villain is the person who decided cheat with her. She knows she's being treated poorly, but still goes back to them.
Which genre do you think this falls under?
Please give thoughts on song structure, chord suggestions, lyrical changes, and if this song sounds like any other songs. Harsh feedback welcome!
Wow, I love your song! It’s super interesting. Sorry I am like a year late with the feedback haha. Your song sounds like like a bit of jazz, soul pop, maybe a bit of R&B. This is a little reminiscent of the vocals and lyrics of Amy Winehouse. If you’d like to make it accessible, stick the bridge and chorus in between the verses. Otherwise I think you’re song is great as is!
March 28, 2024
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[verse 1]
if i packed my crimson luggage
paid the $3 fee
if i boarded that train
would u come chasin after me
or would it take u till sunset
to notice the lack of heat
cuz you never never seem
to be missing me
[verse 2]
now if i travelled 50 west
bought myself a pretty house
would u replace me in a heartbeat
or weep on that leather couch
would u finally leave ur woman
and surrender all your love
or would u make an empty promise
hoping it’s enough
[bridge]
think i know better
than to
answer the caller
knows you
could never leave her
[chorus]
but this mistress knows her place
and she’ll be waiting by the side door
this mistress knows her place
and she’ll be waiting by the side door
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I love your singing. It’s really good. Sorry I’m not help with chord or song structure.
June 09, 2022
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Wow, I love your song! It’s super interesting. Sorry I am like a year late with the feedback haha. Your song sounds like like a bit of jazz, soul pop, maybe a bit of R&B. This is a little reminiscent of the vocals and lyrics of Amy Winehouse. If you’d like to make it accessible, stick the bridge and chorus in between the verses. Otherwise I think you’re song is great as is!
March 28, 2024
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Marketa Black
I love your singing. It’s really good. Sorry I’m not help with chord or song structure.
June 09, 2022
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