The song describes the feelings of a man who is out and about, with no romantic pursuits, but is caught up with emotions when he meets someone and is not sure what the feelings are.
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Pop/Country/Country-Pop Ballad © 2015, Raymond Byabazaire
Male vocalist
CAN YOU TELL
1- There are times you go out looking
For some crazy fun in town
And you know your mind is open
You just want to fool around
Now you see someone laughing
With that bar tender, Joe
You decide you want
To see how it goes
Chorus - Can you tell if you’re under a spell?
You have got your pride, but you know what’s inside
Can you tell if you’re under a spell?
Sometimes it takes a while to dig her style.
2 - Now you tend to go ignore her
As you see her in a crowd
But you know your heart is warmer
When you hear her lovely sound
There are fancy people calling
There’s a party on the green
But there’s nothing that could bring
The love and heart that she means
Chorus –
Bridge You tell yourself it’s gonna end
That you will move on and you’ll mend
But in your heart, something won’t let go
Give yourself the time to learn more
Give yourself the time to learn more
Melody & Lyric: Raymond Byabazaire
P.O. Box 22286
Kampala, Uganda
East Africa
Tel: +256-756-685422, +256-772-685422
ntaho71@hotmail.com
rbyabazaire@yahoo.com
raesoulman@gmail.com
raesoulman.reverbnation.com
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