An upbeat summer song of heartbreak. I've recently added accordion to the mix. I'm also using this track to set up my marketing foundation as I have other songs being completed over the summer.
Any and all feedback is appreciated. I've heard good feedback about the imagery in the verses. The chorus has been criticized for being a bit too repetitive. I welcome any feedback that builds in these areas others. I'm a sponge with tough skin. Your feedback will help me keep leaning and improving. Keep writing, and rewriting!
Hey Brad,
Just got the new issue of American Songwriter and saw your song and name. Fantastic. So happy for you. You certainly didnt need my feedback. Congrats
August 24, 2021
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Title: Drip
Songwriter: Brad Mays; brad@blk-records.com; @bradmays (Instagram)
Verse
Girl your tail lights drove me north of crazy
A month of guy’s nights couldn’t even save me
So I booked a ticket south
Somewhere to drown your memory out
Now sweat beads racing down a Bud Light label
Tattooing wet rings on this bamboo table
I lean back and I start to drift
Give this cold 12 ounce a lift and
Chorus
Your memory starts to drip drip drip
From the moment that I tip tip tip
This cold bottle to my lip lip lips
Never letting me forget get get
Verse
Steel drums tapping out that Kingston rhythm
Island people sway and I sway with ‘em
We’re here to party and forget
I give this Red Stripe cap a flip and
Chorus
Your memory starts to drip drip drip
From the moment that I tip tip tip
This cold bottle to my lip lip lips
Never letting me forget get get
Bridge
A new distraction has me almost fixed
Suntan lines spinnin round her hips
She brings Bacardi to my lips and
Chorus
Your memory starts to drip drip drip
From the moment that I tip tip tip
This cold bottle to my lip lip lips
Never letting me forget get get
Chorus
Your memory starts to drip drip drip
From the moment that I tip tip tip
This cold bottle to my lip lip lips
Never letting me forget get get
Chorus
Your memory starts to drip drip drip
From the moment that I tip tip tip
This cold bottle to my lip lip lips
Never letting me forget get get
(c) 2021 Brad Mays
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Amazing song and I agree - incredible imagery in the verses. I don’t know if I would call the chorus repetetive, but I would probably change the end of the second and fourth lines to something other than the same 3 word pattern. But man I really love the vibe of the song and the concept is fantastic. Needless to say the instrumentation is great and if that is you singing then I applaud that as well.
August 22, 2021
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Hey Brad,
Just got the new issue of American Songwriter and saw your song and name. Fantastic. So happy for you. You certainly didnt need my feedback. Congrats
August 24, 2021
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Allan Rosensweig
Amazing song and I agree - incredible imagery in the verses. I don’t know if I would call the chorus repetetive, but I would probably change the end of the second and fourth lines to something other than the same 3 word pattern. But man I really love the vibe of the song and the concept is fantastic. Needless to say the instrumentation is great and if that is you singing then I applaud that as well.
August 22, 2021
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