Inspired from a story of a young lady that was sexual abused in her childhood along with health complication coming to the realization that the pain had purpose and you're stronger now because it. Be Blessed. #PopGospelSpeaks
Where do we from here? Did it successfully execute the emotions it was supposed to emit? What are those emotions to you? What can be better?
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(Verse) 1A:
Its hard to deal
With what just happened
How do I feel
Nobody's asking
How can I heal
Pains everlasting
This isn't real
I can't imagine
Why You chose this
To be my chains
Why You let this
Start the rain
1B:
I have to stay
But want to leave
This contamination
You'll never
Disrupted concentration
Yearning for peace
All this devastation is killing me
This isn't real
I can't imagine
Why You chose this
To be chains
Why You let this
Start the rain
(Chorus)
In the midst of the pain
In the midst of the fear
In the midst of
The guilt and shame (yea)
Just had to be there
So glad you were there
Just had to be there
So glad you were
(Verse 2)
To go through
What I been through
Without a trace of you is like
Agony
To infinity
With no ending in sight
You started to show the light
There was through tragedy
Its all (a)part of my destiny
Chorus)
In the midst of the pain
In the midst of the fear
In the midst of
The guilt and shame (yea)
Just had to be there
So Glad you were there
Just had to be there
So glad you were
(Bridge)
Please stop the bleeding
I'm worn and weaken
No way I can make it through
Please show me the reason
For this painful season
Just wanna be used by you
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I think the instrumentation and melody kinda has a remorseful and hurting kinda feel. I think the rapid fire lyric in the verse is killer and you slow up in the chorus to give it some contrast to the two sections. I think your production sounds pretty good, the only thing id improve would be a production thing, The vocal could use a little tuning in spots. If you are using logic to do the demo, flex pitch is built in and a quick youtube video could teach you how to use it, if you are using pro tools or another daw then id recommend melodyne, they have several different price packages but any of them will give you enough usability to tighten up the vocal. Killer job over all man!
October 25, 2020
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greyson campbell
I think the instrumentation and melody kinda has a remorseful and hurting kinda feel. I think the rapid fire lyric in the verse is killer and you slow up in the chorus to give it some contrast to the two sections. I think your production sounds pretty good, the only thing id improve would be a production thing, The vocal could use a little tuning in spots. If you are using logic to do the demo, flex pitch is built in and a quick youtube video could teach you how to use it, if you are using pro tools or another daw then id recommend melodyne, they have several different price packages but any of them will give you enough usability to tighten up the vocal. Killer job over all man!
October 25, 2020
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