Culmination of an idea I had rolling around my head for a little bit. I was humming the melody while at work and it all just came together pretty quickly after that. Ran to my lunchroom and wrote out the rest of the song in 10 minutes or so. I hear a cross-pollination of early Aldean and maybe Strait.
Imagine what a full production with fiddle and steel, piano, and band backing would sound like. That's what I hear. I always try to write in a conversational sense in most of my songs. Any ideas or comments and critiques are welcome. I've submitted to other services and their comments were welcomed but, I don't think they understood where I was going with the song. Thanks in advance.
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Verse 1
If you don't have the heart
To tell me it's over
Why the hell do you enjoy giving me the cold shoulder
If it's really all that hard
To tell me we're through
Then get on with your life doing what you'd rather do
Chorus
And if you're thinking of leaving
Leave it alone
Remember the love we've made
Before it's dead and gone
If you won't do it for me
Do it for you
If you're thinking of leaving
Baby please think it through
Verse 2
Take me back when it was all brand new
With not a care in the world
Back when I was just your man
You were my girl
Now did we fall that far
To let it fade away
Can't you see
This is me
Begging you to stay
Chorus
And if you're thinking of leaving
Leave it alone
Think of the love we've made
Before it's dead and gone
If you can't do it for me
Do it for you
If you're thinking of leaving
Baby please think it through
Bridge
Don't think for a minute it's over
As we watch our love disappear
It ain't over til it's over
And we're still standing right here
Chorus and tag end
If you're thinking of leaving
Leave it alone
Remember the love we've made
Before it's dead and gone
If you won't do it for me
Do it for you
If you're thinking of leaving
Baby please think it through
If you won't do it for me
Do it for you
If you're thinking of leaving
Baby please think it through
If you're thinking of leaving
Baby please think it through
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Hey man, I really like the melody…good contrast between the verses and chorus…
The first thing I see is that the verses don’t match, the syllable count is not the same and in country it really needs to be as tight as possible…the 2nd is way easier in flow and you’re rushing words in the 1st verse.
This is certainly worth pursuing and fighting for the right line that expresses the most emotions of what is being felt. I really do like the feel and vibe of this…recording is good quality
July 15, 2020
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Bob Strachan
Hey man, I really like the melody…good contrast between the verses and chorus…
The first thing I see is that the verses don’t match, the syllable count is not the same and in country it really needs to be as tight as possible…the 2nd is way easier in flow and you’re rushing words in the 1st verse.
This is certainly worth pursuing and fighting for the right line that expresses the most emotions of what is being felt. I really do like the feel and vibe of this…recording is good quality
July 15, 2020
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