This is version 3 based on a tweaked version of the original lyric
Any feedback welcome thank you
I really like this one, Paul! The music is a ‘trip’ and it has a clear message! It’s a get up and dance song for sure:)
December 28, 2019
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Tail Light Rhapsody
Clare E Steffen and Paul deMarco © 2019
Verse 1
I am here to tell my story... Some will listen, some won’t care
Some will talk right over me... As my words drift in the air
Words that don’t come easy... at least they never did
Thats maybe why she left me... all the things I should have said
It’s the road of good intentions... And I just stood right there when I...
Chorus
I should have chased those tail lights
I should have pleaded come back
I should have said something... done something
More for her heart to see
That’s my story, tail light rhapsody
Verse 2
I could see her tail light dimly... As she drove away that night
Why didn’t I stop and get her back... I could have put up a fight
But fightin’ ain’t my strong point... I’m a lover can’t you see
And love is just a word... When she ain’t got no love for me
I’m telling you so you don’t make the same mistakes I made when I...
Chorus...
Bridge
Well, I guess I’m just a fool
Or a man who got lazy
‘Cause I let that woman go and leave
And now im driving myself crazy
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Hi Paul
For me the intro was quite long at over 33 seconds and it made me want to shut it off but then when you started singing I got back into it. Good 1st verse and liked how you used the little pre chorus “When I” to get to the chorus. I think with a few more tweeks and maybe look at the bridge a bit more this will be a cool song. Thanks for posting
December 23, 2019
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I really like this one, Paul! The music is a ‘trip’ and it has a clear message! It’s a get up and dance song for sure:)
December 28, 2019
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Mike McCorison
Hi Paul
For me the intro was quite long at over 33 seconds and it made me want to shut it off but then when you started singing I got back into it. Good 1st verse and liked how you used the little pre chorus “When I” to get to the chorus. I think with a few more tweeks and maybe look at the bridge a bit more this will be a cool song. Thanks for posting
December 23, 2019
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