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About a man who looks back on his life And brings the lyrics up to present time
Lyrical content , Melody
Thanks Brent! I appreciate the feedback . I see your point That’s why I’d like to co write Give different ideas and tighten up the overall lyrics and song structure .
July 09, 2019
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I REMEMBER PLAYING LIKE I WAS SUPERMAN
BACK AROUND THE AGE OF 5
TOWEL AROUND MY COLLAR
ARMS IN THE AIR UP AND AWAY I WOULD FLY
LIKE SO MANY CHILDHOOD GAMES
THIS ONE ENDED TOO.
BUT I ALWAYS BELIEVED IN THE MAN IN THE MOON (I KNOW HE'D ALWAYS BEEN THERE
I KNOW HE ALWAYS CARED
EVEN WHEN I COULDN'T TELL A SOUL SECRETS WITH HIM I COULD SHARE AND MAYBE ALL I WISHED FOR
HADN'T YET COME TRUE BUT I'VE ALWAYS BELIEVED IN
THE MAN IN THE MOON ) I REMEMBER TURNING 19 AND
FLYING OFF TO THAT FOREIGN LAND I WAS SENT AWAY AS A BOY
TO GO AND KILL THE YELLOW MAN
LATE AT NIGHT DEEP IN THE JUNGLE
IN THE HEAVY RAINS OF MONSOON I SEARCH THE SKIES FOR THE
MAN IN THE MOON (CHORUS) JUST LAST NIGHT I TOOK MY SON OUTSIDE WE STARED INTO THE SKY
I POINTED UP TO THE MAN IN THE MOON AND TOLD HIM HOW HE HELPED ME GET BY I SAID HEY BOY THERE'S GOING TO COME A TIME WHEN THIS OLD MAN WON'T BE HERE HERE FOR YOU BUT YOU CAN ALWAYS COUNT ON
THE MAN IN THE MOON (CAUSE I KNOW HE'S ALWAYS BEEN THERE I KNOW HE'LL ALWAYS CARE EVEN WHEN YOU CANNOT TELL A SOUL
SECRETS WITH HIM YOU CAN SHARE AND MAYBE ALL YOU WISH FOR
SOMEDAY WILL COME TRUE
BUT YOU GOT TO BELIEVE IN THE MAN HE'LL HELP YOU IF YOU CAN
BUT YOU GOT TO BELIEVE IN THE MAN
HE'LL HELP YOU IF HE CAN
BUT YOU GOT TO BELIEVE IN THE MAN IN THE MOON)
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Hey, Denis! Thanks for sharing your song with us. Nice imagery in the 1st verse- I can see it (and relate to it). I wonder, though, if the story in that verse needs to be more ‘on-point.’ Instead of the Superman thing, what if it shows you as a kid out in the treehouse camping at night, looking up at and talking to the man in the moon? Or something like that. Something that points to the chorus more.
Just a thought. Hope it helps. Again, thanks for sharing your song with us!
July 09, 2019
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Thanks Brent! I appreciate the feedback . I see your point That’s why I’d like to co write Give different ideas and tighten up the overall lyrics and song structure .
July 09, 2019
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Brent Baxter
Hey, Denis! Thanks for sharing your song with us. Nice imagery in the 1st verse- I can see it (and relate to it). I wonder, though, if the story in that verse needs to be more ‘on-point.’ Instead of the Superman thing, what if it shows you as a kid out in the treehouse camping at night, looking up at and talking to the man in the moon? Or something like that. Something that points to the chorus more.
Just a thought. Hope it helps. Again, thanks for sharing your song with us!
July 09, 2019
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