A song I wrote after I found out my wife had been having an affair, telling lies about me which resulted in my house being broken into by the man and his friend. They trashed the place, beat me up, hit my dog Reef. They did go to Jail thankfully!
After all the dust settled I met my soulmate and I realised the most important thing is to be a beautiful human being to others, you never know what is around the corner.
General
Hey Daniel, welcome to the Frettie community! I really dig this tune and your style. I agree with Frank. This also reminds me of the U2 kind of style. Storylines for the genre that this song fits aren’t always written with the focus on the story and tend to focus more on the emotions but they can still be successful since people can also relate to emotions. Very cool tune and the vocals and the production is great as well! You did a really great job and I can hear the emotion in the vocals! Good work for sure, thanks for sharing it with us!
March 12, 2019
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Verse
I traded Black sheets and grime
The universe gifted me with a clear direction
I traded Black sheets for White
The smoke from the sage cleared the evil away
Ive got a new lease on life
Ill follow the lead that’s laid out for me
Be A beautiful human
I traded black sheets and grime
The universe gifted me a clear direction
I traded black sheets for white
The smoke from the sage cleared the evil away
Through a blanket of smoke came my true hand to hold
Was unexpected
Through a toxic fire you’re my one desire
This is our good karma
I gotta new lease on life
Follow the lead that’s laid out me
I got a new lease on life
Its to short to be jaded
By vindictive beings
Chorus
I traded black sheets and grime
The universe gifted me a clear direction
I traded black sheets for white
The smoke from the sage cleared the evil away
(Solo
From the heart , jam out!)
Be a beautiful hum
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Great song, great production, super singer (is it you?), reminds me a bit of Bono/U2.
Probably, without your explanations, it would have been difficult to get what you try to tell us. Have in mind that the listener doesn’t know anything of the circumstances. But a lot of Pop/Rock songs are a bit cryptic and despite this successful.
February 28, 2019
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Hey Daniel, welcome to the Frettie community! I really dig this tune and your style. I agree with Frank. This also reminds me of the U2 kind of style. Storylines for the genre that this song fits aren’t always written with the focus on the story and tend to focus more on the emotions but they can still be successful since people can also relate to emotions. Very cool tune and the vocals and the production is great as well! You did a really great job and I can hear the emotion in the vocals! Good work for sure, thanks for sharing it with us!
March 12, 2019
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Frank Renfordt
Great song, great production, super singer (is it you?), reminds me a bit of Bono/U2.
Probably, without your explanations, it would have been difficult to get what you try to tell us. Have in mind that the listener doesn’t know anything of the circumstances. But a lot of Pop/Rock songs are a bit cryptic and despite this successful.
February 28, 2019