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A song about a girl struggling to not get back together with her ex.
Have always felt as thought the second verse of this song is a little to wordy. Would take any opinions or feedback on anything 
Hi Erin, cool vibe on this one and good production! I did find the male bgv actually a bit distracting or off somehow. I would have probably rather just heard more of the female vocal doubled on the track. Might just be my personal preference.
Nice job on the song!
February 18, 2019
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Wow! Nice one, Erin. I really like the upbeat momentum of the whole thing, and the production values are excellent. Very well produced, imho.
I like the lyric of the second verse, except for one little nit. “I’ve never seen it before,” I think should be ‘him’ instead of ‘it’. As for the verbosity, it doesn’t seem to encumber the melody, and probably assures that there isn’t any loss in momentum that a more sparse lyric might cause. Just my opinion.
Again, great job, and great job to the vocalist, as well. I look forward to seeing more of your work up here.
Cheers . . .
February 20, 2019
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Hey Erin, great song! Love the melody, and the first verse builds nicely into the chorus, where there’s lots of cool lyrics that tie it all together.
The one suggestion I’d make is taking a look at the variations in the melody, in the 2nd Verse + 2nd Pre-Chorus, and consider repeating more of the rhythms from 1st Verse + 1st Pre-Chorus - just my two cents!
March 24, 2019
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I agree with Chad - the male vocal feels off - it just feels weird when its a song about being a strong woman.. but Awesome otherwise .. Think this is great and ready for radio!
May 17, 2019
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verse 1
Was gonna play it safe
tonight this time around
just a little bit of make. up
enough to play it cool
no I wasn't gonna fall for any more stories
how you need me back
was gonna leave your side for good this time
but those damn blue eyes
pre chorus-
as you held the door, helping me down
you never did that before, and now
chorus
We take three steps, up to the door
one kiss leads to more
said I wasn't gonna do this, wasn't gonna do this
was gonna take it slow
but two hands pull me closer
one turn of the key and its a roller coaster
of feelings, butterflies, and one more goodnight kiss
no I wasn't gonna do this
verse 2-
Its like a different man, picked me up tonight
sure its the same old truck, but someone new inside
Ive never seen it before, this listening soul
that you've had all night
making me smile, no longer that child, that left me behind
pre-
in the dark that night, same blue eyes, yelling for some space
but you wanted to talk, so you called me up
and got me listening
chorus
We take three steps, up to the door
one kiss leads to more
said I wasn't gonna do this, wasn't gonna do this
was gonna take it slow
but two hands pull me closer
one turn of the key and its a roller coaster
of feelings, butterflies, and one more goodnight kiss
no I wasn't gonna do this
break-
should of let your call just ring, but I thought I had it all planned out
was gonna say you fell short to many times
and walked right out
chorus-
We take three steps, up to the door
one kiss leads to more
said I wasn't gonna do this, wasn't gonna do this
was gonna take it slow
but two hands pull me closer
one turn of the key and its a roller coaster
of feelings, butterflies, and one more goodnight kiss
yeah,
now tell me boy I did not make a mistake
cause I wasn't gonna do this
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Hey Erin,
thank you for sharing this nice song. I love it like it is!
February 12, 2019
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Hi Erin, cool vibe on this one and good production! I did find the male bgv actually a bit distracting or off somehow. I would have probably rather just heard more of the female vocal doubled on the track. Might just be my personal preference.
Nice job on the song!
February 18, 2019
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Wow! Nice one, Erin. I really like the upbeat momentum of the whole thing, and the production values are excellent. Very well produced, imho.
I like the lyric of the second verse, except for one little nit. “I’ve never seen it before,” I think should be ‘him’ instead of ‘it’. As for the verbosity, it doesn’t seem to encumber the melody, and probably assures that there isn’t any loss in momentum that a more sparse lyric might cause. Just my opinion.
Again, great job, and great job to the vocalist, as well. I look forward to seeing more of your work up here.
Cheers . . .
February 20, 2019
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Hey Erin, great song! Love the melody, and the first verse builds nicely into the chorus, where there’s lots of cool lyrics that tie it all together.
The one suggestion I’d make is taking a look at the variations in the melody, in the 2nd Verse + 2nd Pre-Chorus, and consider repeating more of the rhythms from 1st Verse + 1st Pre-Chorus - just my two cents!
March 24, 2019
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I agree with Chad - the male vocal feels off - it just feels weird when its a song about being a strong woman.. but Awesome otherwise .. Think this is great and ready for radio!
May 17, 2019
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Hey Erin,
thank you for sharing this nice song. I love it like it is!
February 12, 2019
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