First I did the opening riff then the rest followed.
Any tips on how the separate things more clearly in the chorus?
Otherwise, any good?
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Hi, thanks for sharing your song with us! Man, I sure wish you’d included the lyrics for us. It helps me dig into the song.
I like that it moves- has some tempo. I also like the title. As far as separating things in the chorus, I honestly can’t tell which part is the chorus. I’m listening for “craving” but I don’t catch it… and there’s not a clear melodic shift or rise to tip me off. (And there’s no lyric to use as a cheat.) There are some different structural pieces, but I’m not sure which is which.
Again, though, I like the energy of it.
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January 11, 2019
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Hi, thanks for sharing your song with us! Man, I sure wish you’d included the lyrics for us. It helps me dig into the song.
I like that it moves- has some tempo. I also like the title. As far as separating things in the chorus, I honestly can’t tell which part is the chorus. I’m listening for “craving” but I don’t catch it… and there’s not a clear melodic shift or rise to tip me off. (And there’s no lyric to use as a cheat.) There are some different structural pieces, but I’m not sure which is which.
Again, though, I like the energy of it.
Hope that helps! Please take a moment to leave a comment on another writer’s song. It doesn’t have to be super-detailed or anything. Just a thought or two about the song. (Also, the best way to GET feedback is to GIVE feedback.) Thanks!
January 11, 2019
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