Hi Brad, overall good work! For me the chorus could be a bit more catchy and melodic to stand out more and I’m not sure about the second bridge. I like the ‘have-tos in want-tos and should-dos in who-knows’ line that is great! Also the feel of the verses is very nice!
November 09, 2018
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Wow, great song! The guitars and other stringed instrument tracks are absolutely amazing! The chorus is great and very clever!
Great melody, great vocals…really great job!
November 12, 2018
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Verse 1
5 am, it’s just another day for pushin’ back all the stuff that gets in the way
Of lovin’ you, and you lovin’ me; yeah we’re livin’ life side by side the way it’s meant to be
The way love was meant to be-
Chorus
We got all the “have-tos” messin’ with the “want-tos”
Watchin’ all the “should-dos” turnin’ into “who-knews”
And right smack in the middle lives me and you
Where everyday at days end I snuggle with my best friend
Never have to pretend, we could start a new trend
Gonna spend the rest of my life lovin’ you baby ‘cause I want to
Verse 2
Off to work, got no time to kill, we’re spendin’ every wakin’ hour chasin’ dollar bills
And it’s killin’ me as we kiss good-bye; at least I know who I’ll be chasin’ comin’ home tonight
Oh, that sweet kiss tonight
Chorus
Bridge
Givin’ up, givin’ in won’t be how this story ends
Plan to stay, stick around, watchin’ how it all works out
Givin’ up, givin’ in won’t be how this story ends
Plan to stay, stick around, watchin’ how it all works out
Chorus
2nd Bridge
I want to, I want to, I want to, I want to, I want to, I want to, baby ‘cause I want to
Chorus ---
(last line of final chorus) Gonna spend the rest of my life lovin’ you, lovin’ you baby ‘cause I want to
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Nice little positive song, I like the feel. Lyrically and musically sound writing wise…
November 09, 2018
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Hi Brad, overall good work! For me the chorus could be a bit more catchy and melodic to stand out more and I’m not sure about the second bridge. I like the ‘have-tos in want-tos and should-dos in who-knows’ line that is great! Also the feel of the verses is very nice!
November 09, 2018
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Wow, great song! The guitars and other stringed instrument tracks are absolutely amazing! The chorus is great and very clever!
Great melody, great vocals…really great job!
November 12, 2018
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Tony True
Nice little positive song, I like the feel. Lyrically and musically sound writing wise…
November 09, 2018
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