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A woman is frustrated with the man she loves because he lives in a space where he doesn't quite share his true feelings and but his actions are there. She needs to know if he loves her and her way of getting him to open up is by telling HIM, he is her everything.
Hi Swaine, the instrumental track sounds good - nice work! Thy lyric is a bit confusing for me and your explanation didn’t help a lot. However maybe in this genre it doesn’t harm too much if the lyric is a bit vague. Keep on!
May 01, 2018
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Cool, smooth track. I’d really like to hear the melody on this as I’m more of a music person. It’s hard to critique the lyrics without hearing the melody but will give a try.
I see that you’re trying to create a resolution by the end of the song but am not sure the problem is defined specifically. It seems a little vague so it’s hard to get an emotional attachment to the singer or subject of the song. More details would help.
May 02, 2018
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When you’re near me, Al I that I can do
is dream of you..
Oh yeah……eahh
Verse 1
What did I miss?
I live in silence
Nothing is real
It this all a dream
How can I, how can I feel this way?
I did everything, everything momma said
This cant be the way love goes?
Chorus:
My love is here
You want it
I have the time
Tell me, tell me
whats on your mind
Are you scared of love again?
Hold on to the end
You are my everything
Verse 2
This really makes no sense
Whats happening on your end
I feel there is something on your mind?
You cant tell me I did something to break your heart
When I told you everything, everything from the start
Dont you know how darn good we are?
Chorus:
Come on home, oh come on home
If you can hear me, baby
Come right back on home
Come back to the place where the love is real
Are you really scared of love again?
Hold on to the end
Baby, You are my Everything
Bridge:
You’re not here; I don't know what to do
cause…
This world is not the same; without you
Since the day..
you left my heart
Been wondering..
if this is who you are
Then you came right back in my life again
Now…..
We’re in love…..
I'm In love with you…..
Chorus x 3:
You came back home, Im so glad that you’re home
Can you feel me baby, So glad you’re home
You came back to the place where the love is real
Our love is soo good; Ill defend
Hold, with me til the end
Baby, you are my everything
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Hi Swaine, the instrumental track sounds good - nice work! Thy lyric is a bit confusing for me and your explanation didn’t help a lot. However maybe in this genre it doesn’t harm too much if the lyric is a bit vague. Keep on!
May 01, 2018
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Cool, smooth track. I’d really like to hear the melody on this as I’m more of a music person. It’s hard to critique the lyrics without hearing the melody but will give a try.
I see that you’re trying to create a resolution by the end of the song but am not sure the problem is defined specifically. It seems a little vague so it’s hard to get an emotional attachment to the singer or subject of the song. More details would help.
May 02, 2018
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Swaine Thompson Sr
As of yet, vocals are not recorded with the instrumental track.
April 30, 2018
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