Last year I performed in a local theatre production of Jesus Christ Superstar and this is a song I wrote with two of my co-performers, Alley Bilodeau and Sean Mullaney.
I'm releasing a full band version of the song as a single on Valentine's Day next year but would be interested in your thoughts in the meantime.
Thanks Jeremy - that’s lovely to hear. I’m going to add some double bass and piano to this version so will try what you’ve suggested!
The band version has a totally different feel - more of a soul feel - it’s been interesting hearing this version which almost felt more country(?) which was why I put it out ‘mid way’!
November 28, 2017
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I agree with Jeremy. Great song. Good job. Looking forward to the band version, and to the “rebuild” of the version here. It does feel like there’s an emotion waiting to come to the surface, and the crescendo that Jeremy references would be cool and satisfying .
November 30, 2017
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You know this is seriously good, right? The guitar is beautifully sparse, and my God can you lot sing.
The only thing that I think holds it back is that it feels like it needs build through a more powerful crescendo through from the entry from the solo female vocalist (“times that we’ve had”) to the “who I am” apex - not through any change in the melody, but by beefing up the accompaniment.
I’d consider going to something that builds up through:
c# (times that we’ve had) d#min fmin f# (on “who I am”), then
a#min (“the highs and the lows”) cmin c# d# (on “who I am”)
That could add a bit more feel and punch to the chorus.
Great work though.
November 28, 2017
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Thanks Jeremy - that’s lovely to hear. I’m going to add some double bass and piano to this version so will try what you’ve suggested!
The band version has a totally different feel - more of a soul feel - it’s been interesting hearing this version which almost felt more country(?) which was why I put it out ‘mid way’!
November 28, 2017
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I agree with Jeremy. Great song. Good job. Looking forward to the band version, and to the “rebuild” of the version here. It does feel like there’s an emotion waiting to come to the surface, and the crescendo that Jeremy references would be cool and satisfying .
November 30, 2017
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Hey guys, here’s the finished version 
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qaM_n_6Bn5w
February 13, 2018
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Jeremy Bean-Hodges
You know this is seriously good, right? The guitar is beautifully sparse, and my God can you lot sing.
The only thing that I think holds it back is that it feels like it needs build through a more powerful crescendo through from the entry from the solo female vocalist (“times that we’ve had”) to the “who I am” apex - not through any change in the melody, but by beefing up the accompaniment.
I’d consider going to something that builds up through:
c# (times that we’ve had) d#min fmin f# (on “who I am”), then
a#min (“the highs and the lows”) cmin c# d# (on “who I am”)
That could add a bit more feel and punch to the chorus.
Great work though.
November 28, 2017