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This is a phrase I use a lot in my day to day life....It kind of struck me one day as I was on my break from my day job and I started playing around with it. I actually wrote the first couple verses and chorus in between work duties.
Hope y'all like it 
It's not exactly written in a conventional way....
I already have a melody in mind, but would love to hear if anyone has any tweaks or tricks to improve the song and the flow of the lyric.
I'm open to any and all constructive criticism. I want to get better
Thank you Kristina! I did wonder about using that line so much but I was at a bit of a loss as to what else to use. It just seemed to fit, especially with the melody I have in mind.
I’ll see if I can work it out with my rudimentary piano skills (non-existent) and see if I can’t get the melody idea across
Thank you for your feedback!!
September 21, 2017
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Hi, Sherri! Thanks for sharing your song! I really like the title. It’s intriguing. I think you have a good opportunity here to really paint some pictures that will draw the listener in. For example, in the 1st verse (and this isn’t phrased out- just the thoughts), “So I’ve been thinking about that old F-150 and how I could hear it coming from two blocks away. It’s funny how I catch myself listening for it on Friday nights.”
Some lines like that can draw the listener in, let them know (in pictures) what their relationship used to be like. In the 2nd verse you could talk about how you’ve been thinking about how things went wrong… but it wasn’t really that bad. Or something. Move the emotional thought forward.
Just a few thoughts. Hope it helps!
October 14, 2017
Hey Brent! Thank you so much for commenting I went a little fan-girly there when I saw that you did heehee.
I really appreciate the comments, I love the idea of bringing more imagery into the song.
And your suggestions offer more of an actual story, rather than just the illusion of a story.
I’m going to give it a go today and I will repost the result.
Thanks again for commenting
October 15, 2017
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My thoughts are with what Brent said - I’m fairly new to Country as a genre but the concept of this made me think of the kind of thing Kacey Musgraves might write - she often looks at situations from different contrasting viewpoints. The person here is thinking they should get back with their partner - but maybe mention what’s holding them back - are those things they want to overcome? That might inject a bit more story to the story!
October 19, 2017
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So I’ve Been Thinking
v1
So I’ve Been Thinking
Thinking that maybe
What we had ain’t really gone
Yeah I’ve been thinking
About you baby
How I treated you so very wrong
Pre-Chorus
After all the broken promises
That we have lived
Oh we’ll never find our way
If we don’t give a little
Chorus
So I’ve been thinking
Thinking that maybe
You and I should try again.
v2
Well I was walking
Down your street
I wasn’t really looking for you
I saw your mama
Out on the front porch
She said you feel the same way too
Pre-Chorus
Oh boy, I miss you and I need you
Like the heavens above
And I want you to know that
You’ve always had my love
Chorus
So I’ve been thinking
Thinking that maybe
You and I should try again.
v3
We started talking
As our eyes met
We didn’t need to say a word
You kissed my forehead
And wrapped me in your arms
My heart finally found its cure.
Pre-Chorus
Now boy, my heart is full
I swear I’ll never let you go
This is meant to be
Oh yes I know it’s so
Chorus
So I’ve been thinking
Thinking that maybe
You and I should try again
Yeah I’ve been thinking
Thinking that maybe
I can’t wait for our life to begin
1
Love the hook!! My only suggestion would be to not have quite as many, “So I’ve Been Thinking” phrases in the lyric. I would love to hear the melody!!
September 21, 2017
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Thank you Kristina! I did wonder about using that line so much but I was at a bit of a loss as to what else to use. It just seemed to fit, especially with the melody I have in mind.
I’ll see if I can work it out with my rudimentary piano skills (non-existent) and see if I can’t get the melody idea across
Thank you for your feedback!!
September 21, 2017
1
Hi, Sherri! Thanks for sharing your song! I really like the title. It’s intriguing. I think you have a good opportunity here to really paint some pictures that will draw the listener in. For example, in the 1st verse (and this isn’t phrased out- just the thoughts), “So I’ve been thinking about that old F-150 and how I could hear it coming from two blocks away. It’s funny how I catch myself listening for it on Friday nights.”
Some lines like that can draw the listener in, let them know (in pictures) what their relationship used to be like. In the 2nd verse you could talk about how you’ve been thinking about how things went wrong… but it wasn’t really that bad. Or something. Move the emotional thought forward.
Just a few thoughts. Hope it helps!
October 14, 2017
0
Hey Brent! Thank you so much for commenting I went a little fan-girly there when I saw that you did heehee.
I really appreciate the comments, I love the idea of bringing more imagery into the song.
And your suggestions offer more of an actual story, rather than just the illusion of a story.
I’m going to give it a go today and I will repost the result.
Thanks again for commenting
October 15, 2017
0
My thoughts are with what Brent said - I’m fairly new to Country as a genre but the concept of this made me think of the kind of thing Kacey Musgraves might write - she often looks at situations from different contrasting viewpoints. The person here is thinking they should get back with their partner - but maybe mention what’s holding them back - are those things they want to overcome? That might inject a bit more story to the story!
October 19, 2017
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Kristina Bandina
Love the hook!! My only suggestion would be to not have quite as many, “So I’ve Been Thinking” phrases in the lyric. I would love to hear the melody!!
September 21, 2017