I think I know, but I have no idea.
Stream of Consciousness:
I love the whistles.
I wish the mic was closer to your voice.
I love the sound of the guitar.
Chorus has nice melody.
Overall song is easy going.
“And I lost myself in a pool of dreams.
And I thought I would fly away. Or so it seems.”
Bridge is nice.
Like the “No oh oh”
Like the “Oh I thought” ad lib, too.
Your ad lib and lyrical repeats are fun and you’re great at them.
What would happen if you wrote a song with intentional repeats for chorus and verses?
Whistling is excellent. Please do this more
November 20, 2013
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You have a great voice! I dig the Jason Mraz/Jack Johnson meets India.Arie kind of vibe!
I’d love to know your thoughts on what the song is about! I got that it’s about finding success and thinking it’s going to make you happy, but you wind up losing yourself in the end. Is that accurate?
I dig the chords/melody a lot in the chorus. Right noe the verse chords and chorus chords are the same. (I think?) Changing up the chords in the verses will really helpall your sections stand apart from one another.
Keep posting on here! I’d love to hear more of your voice!
July 09, 2013
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Stream of Consciousness:
I love the whistles.
I wish the mic was closer to your voice.
I love the sound of the guitar.
Chorus has nice melody.
Overall song is easy going.
“And I lost myself in a pool of dreams.
And I thought I would fly away. Or so it seems.”
Bridge is nice.
Like the “No oh oh”
Like the “Oh I thought” ad lib, too.
Your ad lib and lyrical repeats are fun and you’re great at them.
What would happen if you wrote a song with intentional repeats for chorus and verses?
Whistling is excellent. Please do this more
November 20, 2013
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Sarah Spencer
You have a great voice! I dig the Jason Mraz/Jack Johnson meets India.Arie kind of vibe!
I’d love to know your thoughts on what the song is about! I got that it’s about finding success and thinking it’s going to make you happy, but you wind up losing yourself in the end. Is that accurate?
I dig the chords/melody a lot in the chorus. Right noe the verse chords and chorus chords are the same. (I think?) Changing up the chords in the verses will really helpall your sections stand apart from one another.
Keep posting on here! I’d love to hear more of your voice!
July 09, 2013
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