This song is about a man who thought he was happily married - only realize his wife only stayed in the marriage for the children's sake. Once they were gone, she was gone too. Simple 3 chord song
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I’m sorry - but these songs are as finished as I can get them. I’m 73 and i’ve stopped working to improve them. If you can get some mileage out of them, I’d be happy to share authorship credit with you.
Rick Gwinn
April 22, 2016
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Hurtin’ Love, Broken Dream
A hurtin’ love; that’s all that’ s left of you
A broken dream; and wasted years
A hurtin love, there’s nothing left that I can do
A broken dream, can’ t hold my tears
A middle-aged man, my youth has flown, I thought I’d paid my dues
Workin’ hard to make our lovelight glow
My hair has grayed, the kids are grown, The time was ours to use
The flame has died, but how was I to know
A hurtin’ love; that’s all that’ s left of you
A broken dream; and wasted years
A hurtin’ love; there’s nothing left that I can do
A broken dream, can’t hold my tears
I thought that you were happy, You never said you weren’t
A real good mother you were meant to be
But, ‘when our kids were set free, You really left me burnt
The lover wasn’t left in me
A hurtin’ love; is all that’ s left of you
A broken dream; and wasted years
A hurtin’ love; there’s nothing left that I can do
A broken dream, can’t hold my tears
A broken dream, can’t hold my tears
A hurtin’ love; is all that’ s left of you
A broken dream; and wasted years
A hurtin’ love; there’s nothing left that I can do
A broken dream, can’t hold my tears
A broken dream, can’t hold my tears
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I would re-upload this with the vocals a little bit more forward in the mix and with a tad less effects on them. The bass line is really good, but it and the snare overpowers your vocals and makes it hard to hone in and focus on the lyrics.
April 21, 2016
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I’m sorry - but these songs are as finished as I can get them. I’m 73 and i’ve stopped working to improve them. If you can get some mileage out of them, I’d be happy to share authorship credit with you.
Rick Gwinn
April 22, 2016
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I would re-upload this with the vocals a little bit more forward in the mix and with a tad less effects on them. The bass line is really good, but it and the snare overpowers your vocals and makes it hard to hone in and focus on the lyrics.
April 21, 2016
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