I wrote this track in a different setting for me. I sat down for about 4 hours with Bobby John and Murray Daigle in Toronto ON, and started it from scratch. As a young writer they asked me what I wanted to write about and this is the result.
How does it sound? What genre do you think it fits in and also is its something that you could listen too? Do you like the lyric or simple story of the lyric.
Thanks for taking the time to listen and provide feedback. This song’s evolution was so much quicker than Carnival - where I labored over every line in the song. Originally I had a bridge that was different and took the song to a different place. The producer I was working with suggested we cut the bridge out and just use another pre-chorus with a slightly different chord progression. When I perform the song live I think I will through the bridge back in. The song is really about being young, open and free with an ocean of possibility. Thanks again for the constructive feedback - I really appreciate it. I will check out your songs as well. Mikalyn
February 22, 2016
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Nice song Mikalyn! I see this as a pop song, I really like the flow of it. I really get the sense of living in the moment.
February 24, 2016
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Free as a Bird by Mikalyn Hay, Murray Daigle, Bobby John
Verse 1
Did you ever feel
Did you ever feel
Like there was more than meets the eye
Did you ever dream
Did you ever dream
The clouds were yours that you could fly
Pre Chorus
I want rush like the wind
i want run through the rain
kicking off these shoes I want to feel it
one step at a time
feel the cold on my skin
see the sun creeping in
open eyes for the view I want to see you
one glance at a time
Chorus
I am free as a bird
like an untamed melody
just try to catch me
I am free as a bird
I'm the ocean at your feet
You cant hold me down
Just try to catch me now
Verse 2
Did you ever hope
Did you over hope
The moment lasted a little longer
Did you ever love
Did you ever love
Do much you felt it down to the bone
Chorus
I am free as a bird
like an untamed melody
just try to catch me
I am free as a bird
I'm the ocean at your feet
You cant hold me down
Just try to catch me now
Bridge/Pre Chorus
I want to fight for it all
I dont care if i fall
Kickin off these shoes I want to feel it
One step at a time
Feel the cold on my skin
See the sun creeping in
Open eyes for the view I want to see you
one glance at a time
Chorus
I am free as a bird
like an untamed melody
just try to catch me
I am free as a bird
I'm the ocean at your feet
you cant hold me down
try to catch me now
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I would say in the pop genre, has a wonderful flow to the rythum. Great use of the “motion” sence. I think that’s what keeps my ear to the song. The rythum of the lyrics with the rythum of the instruments has a wonderful up and down flow like a bird flying around free so when the chorus hits the lyrics come to life. I am a bit confused though with the ocean line. Your a bird and then your also an ocean? As far as the verses, nice melody. I’m not sure exactly what the story is. It feels like they are separate sentences strung together. It would be helpful to the listener to know what the story is by using more imagery that arouses the listeners 5 senses. I like this song. Keep workin at it.
February 21, 2016
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Thanks for taking the time to listen and provide feedback. This song’s evolution was so much quicker than Carnival - where I labored over every line in the song. Originally I had a bridge that was different and took the song to a different place. The producer I was working with suggested we cut the bridge out and just use another pre-chorus with a slightly different chord progression. When I perform the song live I think I will through the bridge back in. The song is really about being young, open and free with an ocean of possibility. Thanks again for the constructive feedback - I really appreciate it. I will check out your songs as well. Mikalyn
February 22, 2016
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Nice song Mikalyn! I see this as a pop song, I really like the flow of it. I really get the sense of living in the moment.
February 24, 2016
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Jamie Wilkinson
I would say in the pop genre, has a wonderful flow to the rythum. Great use of the “motion” sence. I think that’s what keeps my ear to the song. The rythum of the lyrics with the rythum of the instruments has a wonderful up and down flow like a bird flying around free so when the chorus hits the lyrics come to life. I am a bit confused though with the ocean line. Your a bird and then your also an ocean? As far as the verses, nice melody. I’m not sure exactly what the story is. It feels like they are separate sentences strung together. It would be helpful to the listener to know what the story is by using more imagery that arouses the listeners 5 senses. I like this song. Keep workin at it.
February 21, 2016