Wordplay Thursday #92

Wordplay Thursday

Welcome to Wordplay Thursday!

I think a huge part of effective writing, songwriting or otherwise, is wrapping intangible ideas or emotions in imagery.  I want you to wrap today’s topic in sensory images.  Use any or all of the five senses.  How does this idea LOOK, SOUND, SMELL, TASTE, and FEEL?

Feel free to get as crazy, genre-appropriate, or as imaginative as you want. The point is to get the creative juices flowing. And it’s a good thing to dig deeper, so don’t stop at the first idea that hits you. Try coming up with at least five things.

And remember, we’re going for ONLY imagery.  We’re not talking ABOUT the topic.  We’re SHOWING the topic with imagery.  Show me, don’t tell me!

Today’s topic is:

DISAPPOINTMENT

I’ll give you an example to get you started:

“His rose bouquet and his eyes both lowered at her front door when her mom said, ‘I’m sorry, she’s not here’.”

I’d love to hear what you come up with, so please share in the comments. Oh, and please keep your posts below an R-rating. It’s a family show, after all!

God Bless,

Brent

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Thanks to Matt Martoccio, Amy Nichols, Tim Bell, Janet Goodman, Joe Slyzelia, Ken Matthiessen, Brenda, Mark Steven Brocke and everyone else for your great additions to Wordplay Thursday #91 (read it here)! Great job!

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Brent

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16 thoughts on “Wordplay Thursday #92”

  1. The evening breeze blew cool air on her face and carried with it the whistle of a distant train, making her heart ache deeply for something she couldn’t define.

  2. Transported by her scent to the cold fire of regret to a lost place where their souls were once entwined

  3. The look of horror on her face.. .quickly gave way into a grin the size of Manhattan…as she could barely control her laughter …that soon had her roaring in uncontrollable hysterics…with tears streaming down her face…clutching at her sides…she looked down at her four year old son Johnny…who was covered in flour from head to toe…& asked him what he was doing…he looked up at her with a big smile on his face & said proudly, ” Cookin’! ”

  4. Sorry…obviously…I missed the theme ” DISAPPOINTMENT ”…I guess that’s what

    happens…when you read things half asleep…without that 2nd coffee in you…

      1. Thanks Brent! In acting…I’ve heard the term…” go for the opposite ”

        …well…in this case…I guess I really did! Ha ha!

  5. Humm? Not sure if this is telling you, in my mind I’m seeing this image of an individual with high hopes and dreams that doesn’t go as planed (disappointment). So I’m writing this to try and show what happened to someone going to California to be an actor/actress and it’s not working out the way they planned. With that said here it goes->
    “She left oklahoma chasing a dream in California,
    She heard about the bright lights,
    Thought they’d be waiting on her,
    All she wanted was a better life,
    More than Tulsa had to offer,
    But now she’s standing at the street lights,
    Selling her soul to fornicators,
    -Well she’s a daughter of liberty
    -And a product of California
    -Yeah she’s a daughter of liberty
    -And a product of California.
    She walks along the streets at night,
    Thinking about her life,
    Yeah the life she left behind,
    She calls her momma says its alright,
    One day soon I’ll be living in the spot light,
    -Well she’s a daughter of liberty
    -And a product of California
    -Yeah she’s a daughter of liberty
    -And a product of California.
    Earl Keith Jr. 😉

  6. She tries so hard to please him
    But she never gets it right
    What starts out nice and easy
    Always ends up in a fight
    Life shouldn’t be this hard
    She tells herself no more
    As she’s cleaning up his dinner
    Off the kitchen floor

  7. Drive the ink into the paper, so those words he’ll surely hear.
    If she’d have shouted from her mouth, in the room they’d disappear.
    A tremble and a cramp won’t slow her hand now.
    But the list is pages long and the ink spilled all around.
    To wipe the blue away, she’d need only dry tears.
    It’s the cheap perfume not hers that lingers beneath his ears.
    In hopes of closing this book, she uses the ink like a friend.
    Sits back, sighs and frowns, then picks up the pen again.
    A look at the ceiling, for God’s approval and a nudge.
    Crumpled paper on the floor with hopes blurred in a smudge.
    Those words left in writing for him to soak through thin skin.
    What she takes with her is a life time of try, and giving in.

  8. The father of the twenty-two year old boy tried his best to conceal his feelings the day after UT graduation day when he realized his son would not be coming to work at the family business afterall, instead the young man hopped on the band bus with his high school best friend for a 30 day tour.

  9. Answered the phone on the first ring happy as can be when the man said we decided to go with someone a little more qualified.

    Didn’t know which was lower, his pride or his head
    When he answered her phone instead

    Finally able to visit his favorite website
    All ready to play not expecting a fight
    Pride on his face as he reads his name shouted out
    Reads the subject of the week, his thoughts grow loud
    Tries to make a comment and isn’t allowed
    Legs shaking, mind racing was he voted out
    —-
    All dressed up in his red, white and blue
    Teeth showing bright watching the evening news
    His heart stopped, dry mouth and he couldn’t breath
    As the newsman announces the next president to be
    —-
    Burgers pre made and grill all heated up
    Tables, chairs and beer in the back of the truck
    Family and friends will be here in no time
    Then the rain starts to fall as he’s slicing a lime
    The cold water hits his tanned skin from the sky
    As the salty water starts to fall from his eye

  10. I’m gonna try and turn this a positive song here (Brent, I have been listening to your advice !), so here goes:

    I walked into a brighter room
    After seventeen days working to the bone
    And I know she was lonely waiting for her man
    So I promised to be there every moment I can

    I was waiting for the tears and to hear regret
    But she just held me closely in her arms and said

    She was never disappointed in me
    Even at the worst she would always believe
    Feel the fire in her heart, see the light in her eyes, until the last breath she breathes
    She was never disappointed in me

  11. Disappointed in the rain
    that washes the days away
    Disappointed in the tears
    that I cried through all the years
    All the hurt, the loss, the heartache
    Gives me strength enough to dream
    No I wont, let my disappointments
    Get the better of me

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